Blowing a frigid, deathly chill against my face;
The majestic beasts,
Swiftly sprinting,
Lone mavericks forming a single unit
The scent of fresh unpolluted air filling my lung,
Adrenaline,
Runs through my body;
Brute force,
Determined dogs dragging dense sled
Astonished;
The snow dancing in the wind gracefully,
Surrounding me like a fortress of ice blocking me from all of my worries in the city;
The exhilaration,
What more is there?
2 comments:
Jake Great Poem
The first two lines i would put together so that the poem flows a little bit more
I would put the third and fourth line together as well
I would add another line between the 6th and 7th line i would put a line in to explain a little bit abou the fresh air... for example: The fresh air relax's yet energizes ,or something that the air did for you
i would put lines 7 and 8 together
i would add one morel ine at the end like "Nothing is more relaxing"
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